Fill-in-Story: A scary Halloween

Remember I wrote the Story called a scary Halloween about Patrick and Zach went 

trick-or-treating to any Houses before they went on a Magic Carpet and took them to the Island of the Devil of Solitude where Beezle was.
Well, take a look at this!

It was a Dark and scary Halloween Night. Patrick and his real Friend, Zach, were out Trick-or-treating. Patrick was wearing a Pirate Costume. Zach dressed as a Cowboy. They had already gone to Fun Houses. They collected lots of Candies for their plastic Bags. They came to the Gingerbread House at the dead End of Commercial, Street. “I don’t want to go to that Gingerbread House,” said Zach. “It’s too fattening”.
“C’mon,” insisted Patrick. “Don’t be such a Baby”. Patrick walked up the hard path. Zach followed him behind. They came to the Sugar Door. It was sweet and edible. On the Door was hanging a Rope. Above the Doorbell was a Sign that read, “Pull this”. “Let’s see,” said Zach in a soft Voice. But Patrick rang the Doorbell. A creepy sound filled the Air. “Let’s go,” begged Zach. “This Place is too disturbing.” At that Moment, the Door opened with a creaking Sound. A fat old Woman appeared. Her Hair was purple and long. Her Eyes were like Sapphire. Her nose was shaped like a Button. She was wearing a long Cape. On her Head was a Hat. “What do you want?” she asked in a raspy Voice. Zach was too nervous to talk. Patrick managed to say, “Hello” The Woman’s blue Eyes were like Sapphires. “I’ll give you little Kids a fine Lollipop,” she said in a Voice like a Bat. She held out one of her chubby Hands. In it was cold. In her Hand was a Lollipop. The fat old Woman gave it to Patrick. Then she gave Zach a Butterfinger Bar. Patrick and Zach waved to the old Woman and say “Goodbye, big fat Hag” “How dare you call me a big fat Hag?” She said in a fury. So, Patrick and Zach says “We’re terribly sorry we insulted you.” She said “Apology accepted, see you later.” Meanwhile, Patrick whistled to the Magic Carpet to take them to the Island of the Devil of Solitude where Beezle was like the one in “The fantastic Adventures of Unico” and it was off the east Coast of Scotland before Patrick and Zach on a Magic Carpet to see Beezle there. Beezle says, “Hi Patrick! Hello Zach!” Then they shouted, “Hi Beezle!” Soon, Beezle looked that he sees Patrick in a Pirate Costume and Zach in a Cowboy Costume. “Blazing Brimstone! Your Costumes looked amazing!” shouted Beezle. “Thanks, Beezle” Patrick and Zach said. Beezle asked, “Where are you two from?” “We’re from Portland, Maine and we’re here to see you after we were Trick-or-treating.” Patrick answered. Beezle was excited that he would like to show Patrick and Zach to his Temple. In the Temple, where were broken Pillars, Rocks, an Hourglass, and the Statue of the Devil of Solitude, his Dad that Patrick and Zach were nervous about. “Beezle, your Dad looks fat, big, strong, and ugly.” said Patrick, “Yes, he looks mean to any Villagers.” Said Beezle. Zach looked around in the Temple and said, “Your Temple looks like a Castle.” Beezle said, “Thank you, Zach. But before you leave I’m gonna shake Hands with you.” Finally, Patrick shook hands with Beezle, and Zach shook Hands with Beezle, and Zach shook Hands with Beezle. Then he said, "You better leave before the West Wind brings Unico to my Island and I’ll tell him to get out of here. Anyway, Goodbye Patrick. Goodbye Zach. Come visit whenever you like.” Then Patrick and Zach went back on a magic Carpet and flying back to Portland, Maine.